Only little annoying things were 'a hand that was apparently human' and 'a sheet that was apparently paper' or something to that effect. At the time the POV was the agent, and surely he would know if his hand was human or not? he wouldn't look at his hand and wonder what it was, so i assumed you had jumped POV but then that conflicts with the next paragraph, so I did get a little confused.
Found a few more minor (somewhat pedantic) improvements though:
On pages 6-8 you variously use 'The Captain' and 'the captain', would be nice to be consistent. And if you're going to capitalise titles, maybe use 'the First Officer' as well.
Bottom of Page 7
"the Adders hull"
--> "the Adder's hull"?
Page 9
"only then turning around and look back the way he had come"
--> "only then turning around and looking back the way he had come"
From page 10 onwards
"Galcop"
--> "GalCop"
Page 10
"given me. “The Agent replied"
--> "given me." The Agent replied"
"honoury doctorate"
--> "honourary doctorate" ?
Page 11
You use "Military chief of staff" and "military chief of staff" - should be consistent?