Excellent! Love it. I eagerly await the next chapter!
Just a couple of comments:
Page 9 - line 17 - "...suits must be
warn prior to airlock..." should be '
worn'
Page 11 - line 5 - better as "...the
gentleman assassin", rather than "...the
gentleman's assassin" - does he only assassinate gentlemen...??
Moot point in the last page as to whether it should refer to the "...distinctive whine of ramjet drives" rather than "...whine of a ramjet drive", since it had previously commented on "the engine
s".
Also, some lines previously on the last page, it comments "...the Agent had sufficed with a functional repair only." I
believe that is incorrect use of the expression and it should have been expressed as "...the ship had sufficed with a functional...", as it was the ship, not the Agent, which was the subject of the repair.
A bit picky, I realise, but I'm just trying to help...
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Very funny, Scotty, now beam down my clothes...