FEU Fiction: Friends in Deed

Selezen · Post by **Selezen** » Fri Aug 11, 2006 3:18 pm

Part 3 of the Tarklin Chronicles is now complete!

Upon returning to space, Tarklin receives a plea for help from an old friend.

Get the PDF Here

Or read it in installments at the EBBS here

As always, comments would be appreciated! Enjoy!

Selezen · Post by **Selezen** » Mon Aug 14, 2006 9:06 am

No comments?

Was it _that_ bad?

Wolfwood · Post by **Wolfwood** » Mon Aug 14, 2006 9:51 am

For my part, I've been darn busy the past few weeks, but I plan to read the piece next weekend or so... And I promise to give feedback when I do!

Star Gazer · Post by **Star Gazer** » Mon Aug 14, 2006 10:14 am

Well, I thoroughly enjoyed it! Where's parts 1 & 2...?

Couple of small typos..
Pg.12: The only think I’ll ask is that if you capture the Thargoids, you bring them to us.”

Pg.14:The last time Tarklin has seen something like this, it had
been in the fevered hallucinations of his psychosis

Selezen · Post by **Selezen** » Mon Aug 14, 2006 11:11 am

My page for all the stories that I'll be doing in this arc is here:

http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/fic-tarklin.asp

I've fixed the typos in part three now. Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.

drew · Post by **drew** » Tue Aug 15, 2006 10:37 am

Sorry David,

Been away all weekend and am ill today

... will read soon!

Cheers,

Drew.

Davemak · Post by **Davemak** » Wed Aug 16, 2006 4:07 pm

Bloody good!!

drew · Post by **drew** » Thu Aug 17, 2006 9:00 am

Very nice indeed. Enjoyed that the most of all three.

The Dark Wheel org sounds an interesting bunch!

Cheers,

Drew.

Rxke · Post by **Rxke** » Fri Aug 18, 2006 7:24 pm

I'm rereading it from the beginning and am impressed. Are you a lawyer?

One thing though: part 3:

Cowell & MgRath’s main shipyard was in a Coriolis station in orbit above Lave’s northern polar icecap.

That's physically impossible, an object in geosynchronous orbit (meaning it stays above the same spot ) must be equatorial.

Sats/stations whatever in polar orbit circle a globe.... Like spysats, they in effect span the whole world that way...

Edit:

On Xeoner, government votes for YOU

Brilliant! (Okay, so I visit /. waaay too much...)

Rxke · Post by **Rxke** » Fri Aug 18, 2006 8:22 pm

Some more 'proofreading':

friend in deed:

part 4 :

and as a result he now had a ship bristling with a full complement of missiles, a front mounted military laser...

versus part 8:

... Tarklin had equipped his ship with a Military laser...

he already has a mil. laser...

part 8 :

This door led connected to a manoeuvring crane that would transfer an arriving or departing ship between the docking bays and the main docking slit at the front opening of the station.

Could be me, being Belgian, but is that a correct sentence?

Roberto · Post by **Roberto** » Sun Aug 20, 2006 1:51 am

Good read, sir! I shall have to check out the earlier instalments.

(Can't be arsed to proofread, as I get enough of that during the week!)

Selezen · Post by **Selezen** » Mon Aug 21, 2006 8:52 am

Rxke wrote:
I'm rereading it from the beginning and am impressed. Are you a lawyer?

Nope. Good to know I can sound like one though...

Rxke wrote:
One thing though: part 3:
Cowell & MgRath’s main shipyard was in a Coriolis station in orbit above Lave’s northern polar icecap.
That's physically impossible, an object in geosynchronous orbit (meaning it stays above the same spot ) must be equatorial.

Sats/stations whatever in polar orbit circle a globe.... Like spysats, they in effect span the whole world that way...

Would it be better to read that it was in position above the north pole? You're right - it's not meant to be orbiting. It's meant to be further out than the standard geosynchronous orbit...

Thanks for the remarks, guys! Good to know I'm entertaining you...

drew · Post by **drew** » Mon Aug 21, 2006 3:16 pm

I've always wondered this about Elite stations, are they powered? I guess they must be to hold position relative to planets in odd positions. Unless you're in orbit, you're going to be falling down! Bet a coriolis station makes a big splash!

Cheers,

Drew.