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Mutabilis Chapter One - Status Quo Sequel
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 1:51 pm
by drew
Here you go folks.
Progress is slower as mentioned, but hopefully you'll enjoy this story as much as the last one. Let me know what you think.
For newcomers, you'll probably want to read 'Status Quo' first (link in signature) otherwise a lot of it might not make sense.
Mutabilis - Chapter One
I've also set up a wiki page for
Mutabilis
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 3:24 pm
by Uncle Reno
Very nice, as excellent as always. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 3:40 pm
by Selezen
Damn fine writing, Mr Wagar!
Why do I get this horrible feeling you're going to bugger up a lot of my half-written stuff?
No worries though. Keep them coming!
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 5:21 pm
by Frame
lovely, i really enjoyed this..
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 5:46 pm
by LittleBear
. Look forward to Chapter 2!
Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 8:04 pm
by jonnycuba
a page turner, as usual...
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 7:14 am
by Dr. Nil
Good job.
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 9:17 am
by CaptKev
I'm hooked, can't wait for the next chapter!
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 9:43 am
by drew
Glad you're enjoying it folks, I'll cook up chapter two as soon as I can.
Hope you picked up the back handed 'Elite' reference and the nod to Isaac Asimov...
:At Selezen - I'd love to see what thoughts you had on the whole Raxxla thing, I've tried to stay true to your chronology and the original 'Dark Wheel', but my story is not going to jive with Jason Togneri's
Darkness Falls. That took away a little too much of the mystery surrounding Raxxla for my liking - not that it's not a great story in its own right though!
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 1:00 pm
by Captain Hesperus
Ooohhhhhh!!!
This is shaping up to be a brilliant sequel. George Lucas, eat your heart out!
Captain Hesperus
Meh, but you knew I'd say this....
Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 12:36 am
by Gareth3377
Awesome opening - looking forward to the next chapter now...
Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 9:56 am
by Arexack_Heretic
like the pun on the Planeteer-descriptions.
revolting experience indeed!
Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:38 am
by Commander McLane
Very promising beginning! I'm eager to read more!
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BTW: Noticed one typo, top of page four of chapter one:
Inside all three passengers experienced a sudden sensation of drag as the Adder suddenly became an aerodynamic flying machine as apposed to a small rectangular brick falling out of space.
Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:49 am
by Arexack_Heretic
same sentence, also contains sudden/suddenly. losing the second one advised.
Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 1:09 pm
by Rxke
Initially it was planned to shut them down gracefully, but the cost of working on the planet become prohibitive ...
became
so he no idea where he was going
had
the ablative heat shield did its work/quote] you said the adder didn't need maintenance after atm. reentry etc. but ablative heatshields do need replacing after being used... better use ceramic tiles or metallic shielding something like that, heavier but reusable lots of times. (not fiction)
Waiting with baited breath for chapter two