Mutabilis Chapter One - Status Quo Sequel

drew · Post by **drew** » Thu Apr 19, 2007 1:51 pm

Here you go folks.

Progress is slower as mentioned, but hopefully you'll enjoy this story as much as the last one. Let me know what you think.

For newcomers, you'll probably want to read 'Status Quo' first (link in signature) otherwise a lot of it might not make sense.

Mutabilis - Chapter One

I've also set up a wiki page for Mutabilis

Cheers,

Drew.

Uncle Reno · Post by **Uncle Reno** » Thu Apr 19, 2007 3:24 pm

Very nice, as excellent as always. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Selezen · Post by **Selezen** » Thu Apr 19, 2007 3:40 pm

Damn fine writing, Mr Wagar!

Why do I get this horrible feeling you're going to bugger up a lot of my half-written stuff?

No worries though. Keep them coming!

Frame · Post by **Frame** » Thu Apr 19, 2007 5:21 pm

lovely, i really enjoyed this..

LittleBear · Post by **LittleBear** » Thu Apr 19, 2007 5:46 pm

. Look forward to Chapter 2!

jonnycuba · Post by **jonnycuba** » Thu Apr 19, 2007 8:04 pm

a page turner, as usual...

Dr. Nil · Post by **Dr. Nil** » Fri Apr 20, 2007 7:14 am

Good job.

CaptKev · Post by **CaptKev** » Fri Apr 20, 2007 9:17 am

I'm hooked, can't wait for the next chapter!

drew · Post by **drew** » Fri Apr 20, 2007 9:43 am

Glad you're enjoying it folks, I'll cook up chapter two as soon as I can.

Hope you picked up the back handed 'Elite' reference and the nod to Isaac Asimov...

:At Selezen - I'd love to see what thoughts you had on the whole Raxxla thing, I've tried to stay true to your chronology and the original 'Dark Wheel', but my story is not going to jive with Jason Togneri's Darkness Falls. That took away a little too much of the mystery surrounding Raxxla for my liking - not that it's not a great story in its own right though!

Cheers,

Drew.

Captain Hesperus · Post by **Captain Hesperus** » Fri Apr 20, 2007 1:00 pm

Ooohhhhhh!!!

This is shaping up to be a brilliant sequel. George Lucas, eat your heart out!

Captain Hesperus

Meh, but you knew I'd say this....

Gareth3377 · Post by **Gareth3377** » Sun Apr 22, 2007 12:36 am

Awesome opening - looking forward to the next chapter now...

Arexack_Heretic · Post by **Arexack_Heretic** » Sun Apr 22, 2007 9:56 am

like the pun on the Planeteer-descriptions.

revolting experience indeed!

Commander McLane · Post by **Commander McLane** » Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:38 am

Very promising beginning! I'm eager to read more!

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BTW: Noticed one typo, top of page four of chapter one:

Inside all three passengers experienced a sudden sensation of drag as the Adder suddenly became an aerodynamic flying machine as apposed to a small rectangular brick falling out of space.

Arexack_Heretic · Post by **Arexack_Heretic** » Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:49 am

same sentence, also contains sudden/suddenly. losing the second one advised.

Rxke · Post by **Rxke** » Sun Apr 22, 2007 1:09 pm

Initially it was planned to shut them down gracefully, but the cost of working on the planet become prohibitive ...

became

so he no idea where he was going

had

the ablative heat shield did its work/quote] you said the adder didn't need maintenance after atm. reentry etc. but ablative heatshields do need replacing after being used... better use ceramic tiles or metallic shielding something like that, heavier but reusable lots of times. (not fiction)

Waiting with baited breath for chapter two