Rise of the Kirin (Chapts 2 through 5)

Screet · Post by **Screet** » Tue Apr 14, 2009 11:45 am

drew wrote:
Question though - why is the Kirin not equipped with weaponary from the start? Sending out a prototype ship into space unarmed seems tantamount to suicide. I've encountered trouble in the most harmless of systems, if you'll excuse the pun.

Most probably Mr. Shulth did suspect that some party involved would try to get their hands on that ship and so he decided to bring some surprise for them?

Screet

overmage · Post by **overmage** » Tue Apr 14, 2009 3:29 pm

Your writing is getting better and better, I have no Nazi comments to make for them.

Roh'i is a pretty wiley fellow, and an experienced, Deadly rated combateer. Until he gets to Oresle where he can kit up, he stays off the 'space highways', and thusly manages to avoid most pirates. The few he does come across get shot up. There's also his reputation; he's known as a ruthless demon among pirates, and most cower at the mere mention of his name.

IMHO, stuff like this should probably be given to the reader in dribs and drabs and subtle hints (e.g. him walking into a bar and a Fierce Yellow Frog called Xu Berglas jumping out of the way in fright), so that the reader gets this instinctively

You could even stage a fight in a future chapter where a pirate jumps Roh'i, they have a chat and the pirate realizes the identity of the commander and flees.

that would explain perfectly the reason why the prototype ship was sent out unarmed.

ClymAngus · Post by **ClymAngus** » Tue Apr 14, 2009 3:55 pm

overmage wrote:

IMHO, stuff like this should probably be given to the reader in dribs and drabs and subtle hints (e.g. him walking into a bar and a Fierce Yellow Frog called Xu Berglas jumping out of the way in fright), so that the reader gets this instinctively You could even stage a fight in a future chapter where a pirate jumps Roh'i, they have a chat and the pirate realizes the identity of the commander and flees. that would explain perfectly the reason why the prototype ship was sent out unarmed.

Hmm, you know that's a pretty good idea, I think we might include that in a couple of up and coming chapters.......

Or maybe we've already included it..... 0.0

You'll just have to wait to find out!!!!

Website · Post by **DaddyHoggy** » Tue Apr 14, 2009 8:12 pm

overmage wrote:
Your writing is getting better and better, I have no Nazi comments to make for them.

Roh'i is a pretty wiley fellow, and an experienced, Deadly rated combateer. Until he gets to Oresle where he can kit up, he stays off the 'space highways', and thusly manages to avoid most pirates. The few he does come across get shot up. There's also his reputation; he's known as a ruthless demon among pirates, and most cower at the mere mention of his name.
IMHO, stuff like this should probably be given to the reader in dribs and drabs and subtle hints (e.g. him walking into a bar and a Fierce Yellow Frog called Xu Berglas jumping out of the way in fright), so that the reader gets this instinctively You could even stage a fight in a future chapter where a pirate jumps Roh'i, they have a chat and the pirate realizes the identity of the commander and flees. that would explain perfectly the reason why the prototype ship was sent out unarmed.

We call this simply: "Show, don't tell".