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I'm also a little surprised that nobody seems to have figured out who 'Garew Ward' is. It's not that difficult...

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But we knew eventually you'd say something...

We call it the double bluff and you blinked first... :wink:
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Ah...

My eyeballs would have seized if I didn't blink after a week though...!

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Yup this is officially on my top 5 coolest things ever to happen to me on the internet.
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1 character, 2 (all be it the same make) ships and map usage. I feel so included! :)

A fantastic piece of work Mr D!
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ClymAngus wrote:
Yup this is officially on my top 5 coolest things ever to happen to me on the internet.
:)

1 character, 2 (all be it the same make) ships and map usage. I feel so included! :)

A fantastic piece of work Mr D!
Udian's character is a work of genius though, as are the others - I stand on the shoulders of giants etc! :D

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Awesome work, Drew - just finished it (took longer than normal thanks to having to completely rewrite a website in a week) and it was, well, Elite! :-)

"Incursio - if it was registered with the Elite Federation it would automatically get a 'Right On Commander'!!"

I liked the "origin of species" angle and the origin of GalCop... it all sounded very very familiar... ;-)

Since it's filled with characters from other fiction, it's given me the kick to start looking at other people's fiction now (especially El Viejo's work).

I haven't read all the way through this thread, so I don't know if my one niggle has been mentioned before or corrected, but the only thing at the moment that makes my "Elite Universe Maintenance" sense tingle is the biography for Coyote - does the concept of "Spanish" exist in the Elite universe in 31xx? After 500 years separated from the origins of Old Earth, would Coyote's Spanish heritage come from a colony world...for example, the continent of New Hispania on Eeszaa or similar...

Just a thought... :-)
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Selezen wrote:
Awesome work, Drew - just finished it (took longer than normal thanks to having to completely rewrite a website in a week) and it was, well, Elite! :-)

"Incursio - if it was registered with the Elite Federation it would automatically get a 'Right On Commander'!!"

I liked the "origin of species" angle and the origin of GalCop... it all sounded very very familiar... ;-)

Since it's filled with characters from other fiction, it's given me the kick to start looking at other people's fiction now (especially El Viejo's work).

I haven't read all the way through this thread, so I don't know if my one niggle has been mentioned before or corrected, but the only thing at the moment that makes my "Elite Universe Maintenance" sense tingle is the biography for Coyote - does the concept of "Spanish" exist in the Elite universe in 31xx? After 500 years separated from the origins of Old Earth, would Coyote's Spanish heritage come from a colony world...for example, the continent of New Hispania on Eeszaa or similar...

Just a thought... :-)
Ah.. the origin of species owes itself completely to your input. I rewrote the stuff you sent when we discussed the overall plot to make it feel like part of the story - and Daddyhoggy got to narrate it - originally it was in the prologue. In fact Incursio could be summarised by the line from your website:

3151 Thargoids defeated, presumed eradicated. Bioweapons are thought to have been used.

However, history is written by the winners, so my take is that your timeline may be written by Galcop sympathetic authors... :) 'Finis' will deal with the period from 3151-3165 in your timeline, but with the dates compressed - 14 years is too long a period to have an extended adventure within the confines of a single book, so I'll be playing rather 'fast and loose' there I'm afraid!

Hopefully that leaves you free to continue creating your own fiction!

Bio's for the characters were taken directly from the 'owners' of the characters and I only modified them very slightly for form (you can view the original on userpages in the wiki if you're interested). The scene with Udian reviewing his spies information on the other combateers is not from me, but from other folks bios for their characters (except Rebecca - which I wrote)... so as for Coyote's Spanish... you'll have to ask El Viejo...

My sense was it was a sort of 'ex-pat' Spanish community on Zaquesso that retained its identity rather protectively.

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My sense was it was a sort of 'ex-pat' Spanish community on Zaquesso that retained its identity rather protectively.
That is entirely correct... I wrote Coyote's back-story ages ago while I was writing Coyote, and this was the (slightly abbreviated) bio I gave to Drew.
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Finally finished Incursio. Thank you for a very entertaining :D, surprising :shock: and well told 8) story Drew. I found the plot fascinating. It also opens up for svefg pbagnpg va tnynkl 9 va Bbyvgr irefvba 2.0. Jvfu V unq gur gnyrag naq gur gvzr gb qb n "svefg pbagnpg bs gur guveq xvaq.bkc".

Spotted the nantenz "Garew Ward" immediately by the way. Looking forward to reading Finis.

Again, thank you Drew, and consider yourself told off for not apologising for leaving us with such a cliff hanger. :D
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and consider yourself told off for not apologising for leaving us with such a cliff hanger. :D
Tenterhooks deployed. :lol:

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Ah.. the origin of species owes itself completely to your input. I rewrote the stuff you sent when we discussed the overall plot to make it feel like part of the story - and Daddyhoggy got to narrate it - originally it was in the prologue. In fact Incursio could be summarised by the line from your website:

3151 Thargoids defeated, presumed eradicated. Bioweapons are thought to have been used.
I knew it! ;-) Cool, glad to see that the ole' timeline is being used still, and that you remember a conversation from what must be over two years ago now, surely?

One quibble, though, is that I would appreciate it if the use of the timeline could be credited somewhere in the book if that would be acceptable.
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However, history is written by the winners, so my take is that your timeline may be written by Galcop sympathetic authors... :) 'Finis' will deal with the period from 3151-3165 in your timeline, but with the dates compressed - 14 years is too long a period to have an extended adventure within the confines of a single book, so I'll be playing rather 'fast and loose' there I'm afraid!

Hopefully that leaves you free to continue creating your own fiction!
It looks like your story arc is in its own little pocket universe - you're dealing almost exclusively with a narrow cast of characters in one mission, and my stories were looking at the political situation on Lave (and the characters around that) as well as the wider galactic war. Your references to fighting the war in galaxy 1 leaves me the same framework I had before, and I applaud that...and I thank you for it. :-)
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Bio's for the characters were taken directly from the 'owners' of the characters and I only modified them very slightly for form (you can view the original on userpages in the wiki if you're interested). The scene with Udian reviewing his spies information on the other combateers is not from me, but from other folks bios for their characters (except Rebecca - which I wrote)... so as for Coyote's Spanish... you'll have to ask El Viejo...

My sense was it was a sort of 'ex-pat' Spanish community on Zaquesso that retained its identity rather protectively.
Fair do... Still makes for a fearsome "wild frontier" character though. Fantastic characteristion on both your parts.
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lovin' it so far

i downloaded the .pdf and think i spotted a typo

pg 66, third line down

'main' should be 'remain'?

ah, why is it nearly midnight - i must sleep but i must also read!

oh, what the hell - just drink even more coffee tomorrow
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Hey! This is superb Drew - only about half way through - slow to get started, and wanted to read through the other novels again first.

I'm reading the PDF version - don't think it's been mentioned yet (though I've only scanned through the previous messages), but pg. 53, about half way down - "Jim watch the battle unfold..." should be "Jim watched the battle unfold...", I think.

Going to enjoy the rest of this!:-)
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Pansen wrote:
Hey! This is superb Drew - only about half way through - slow to get started
It was my reading of the novel that was slow to get started, not the novel itself, of course! - loved the physical descriptions of the Thargs and the opening with their communications/activities around the wreckage of the Falchion.
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Pansen wrote:
Pansen wrote:
Hey! This is superb Drew - only about half way through - slow to get started
It was my reading of the novel that was slow to get started, not the novel itself, of course! - loved the physical descriptions of the Thargs and the opening with their communications/activities around the wreckage of the Falchion.
He he, no worries, Pansen. Though I'd be surprised if anyone called the first couple of chapters 'slow'! :)

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First story I read on my new iPad--and it rocks! Thanks a lot drew, Incursio is a fantastic read. And my woman looked quite incredulous when I told her that my character appears in a work of fiction :D
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