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New short story : Family (Part 3 now up)
Posted: Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:31 am
by drew
The beginning of my next short...
Hope you enjoy this one.
So, here goes. Part 1, 2 and 3 of
Family.
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Wed Jun 10, 2009 12:16 pm
by DaddyHoggy
Looking forward to it (You shame me into progressing Lazarus!!)
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 7:49 pm
by drew
First part is now up.
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 8:04 pm
by DaddyHoggy
Splendid - do you want me to comment on the spelling mistakes now - or leave it for later?
And now it's my turn - more - more!
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 8:05 pm
by drew
PM them to me if you like!! Will keep writing, got about 3.5 hours on the train tomorrow!
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 8:38 pm
by DaddyHoggy
drew wrote:PM them to me if you like!! Will keep writing, got about 3.5 hours on the train tomorrow!
Cheers,
Drew.
PM'ed!
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 8:53 pm
by drew
Fixed!
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 10:19 pm
by CptnEcho
An enjoyable read, thus far. Please continue.
Posted: Sat Jun 20, 2009 6:14 am
by drew
Part II has now been added to the download above. I suggest you re-read part I at the same time as I had to add a single line for continuity. It's a small but important detail for the plot!
Hope you enjoy! Usual deal with typo's etc - PMs are good. Feedback in the thread...
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Sat Jun 20, 2009 7:48 am
by Diziet Sma
Excellent yarn, Drew...
though perhaps a touch too predictable so far...
This has the makings of a not-so-short story...
Posted: Sat Jun 20, 2009 12:45 pm
by drew
You'll have to wait and see if it pans out as you expect...
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Mon Jun 29, 2009 11:06 am
by drew
Sorry - no progress on this at the moment. I've been repainting the outside of my house!
Real life, eh... what a pain.
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Mon Jun 29, 2009 4:23 pm
by lfnfan
want more!
only minor niggle that Cmdr Gutierra's "in-tray" and the "doorbell" at the palace kinda disrupted my willing suspension of disbelilef.
other than that.. want more!
Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 12:34 pm
by drew
I'll take a look at that when I revisit...!
Will try and get back to this tomorrow. Was too hot to work outside today!
Cheers,
Drew.
Posted: Fri Jul 17, 2009 9:33 pm
by drew
Part 3 is now in the download, with some of the above issues resolved!
Sorry 'bout the delay - been a little bit busy with RL.
Cheers,
Drew.