Oolite Bulletins

Hi all.

Right, I have loads of stories in progress, just thought I would test the water so to speak, so this is the very origins as it were.

I will be .pdf'ing it shortly, just posted it on EBBS as a starting point. Please do not pull punches, honest opinions wanted. Oh, may need a little patience as well, the opening is a little different (not what it looks like).

http://www.alioth.net/cgi-bin/bbs.pl?mi ... action=get

Interesting twist - good read!

I like the idea of looking at the training side of things. How exactly do you get a pilots license at Lave? Great idea.

Nice hook at the end too. Who's the bad guy?

Better not comment on punctuation/spelling etc with my reputation.... but <whisper> there are a few! </whisper>

Keep it coming.

Cheers,

Drew.

Thanks for the feedback so far, yeah - I will tidy the spelling etc for the pdf. I just had to post it before I lost the nerve.

Any other comments? Does it fit well with established cannon?

As far as canon goes, I've based mine on Selezens excellent work and the original Novella 'The Dark Wheel'.

Selezen's stuff is here

http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/oo-timeline.asp
http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/ ... meline.asp
http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/pol-elite.asp

And 'The Dark Wheel' is here - http://www.iancgbell.clara.net/elite/dkwheel.htm

Also worth looking at is the original game manual here - http://www.iancgbell.clara.net/elite/manual.htm

Cheers,

Drew.

Ta Drew - read them already but thanks anyhow.

I will hopefully get all corrected and the .pdf sorted later this week.

What glaring mistakes did you spot?