Oolite Bulletins

I'm done! You can download it at http://db.tt/b2lZ92r.
Original post:
I'm working on a short story because of a lack progress on The Shadowed Hand, maybe this will get me back into the storytelling mood:

This story adds a bit of trivia, such as what a Caduceus' personality is like. One of the main characters, Komodo, is a Caduceus Omega, so you can get a view of the inner working of the great ships. They are quick to anger but loyal, and have a hard time avoiding a fight.
This short story should be released tomorrow (July 14) if at all possible.

RyanHoots wrote:

They are quick to anger but loyal, and have a hard time avoiding a fight.

They're fierce gunships, and know it. They never try to avoid a fight, but instead charge right in and too damn bad for any being that gets in the way.

A Caddy Omega is a born Thargslayer. If the bugs don't have any fear of one, at the very least they have a healthy respect.

Cmdr Wyvern wrote:

RyanHoots wrote:

They are quick to anger but loyal, and have a hard time avoiding a fight.

They're fierce gunships, and know it. They never try to avoid a fight, but instead charge right in and too damn bad for any being that gets in the way.

A Caddy Omega is a born Thargslayer. If the bugs don't have any fear of one, at the very least they have a healthy respect.

Exactly. So far, Komodo has had a hard time restraining herself from heading for distant explosions to join the battle...

Alright, almost done! The story is about my encounter with the Black monks.

Done! http://db.tt/b2lZ92r

I'm not sure if it's virgin media or firefox that's the problem, but I can't seem to follow the link. Any help please?

Thanks in advance.

Eldon wrote:

I'm not sure if it's virgin media or firefox that's the problem, but I can't seem to follow the link. Any help please?

Thanks in advance.

I could download it and re-host it?

DaddyHoggy wrote:

Eldon wrote:

I'm not sure if it's virgin media or firefox that's the problem, but I can't seem to follow the link. Any help please?

Thanks in advance.

I could download it and re-host it?

Sure. I dislike Dropbox, but I have no good sever (box.net is only for OXPs).

Eldon wrote:

I'm not sure if it's virgin media or firefox that's the problem, but I can't seem to follow the link. Any help please?

Thanks in advance.

Well I'm on Vermin Mediocre (10Mb) and I use Firefox (4).

But I've re-hosted on my Box account in case you're not the only one with the issue: http://www.box.net/shared/e3t511vhcop94n1bdk20

DaddyHoggy wrote:

Well I'm on Vermin Mediocre (10Mb) and I use Firefox (4).

Ok, so same service from the same ISP, Firefox 5 running on ubuntu 11.04 here. The problem seems to be that instead of trying to load a page from db.tt something "helpfully" adds a www so I get www.db.tt which doesn't exist Wish I knew what it was. Anyhows, thanks for the re-host.


@ RyanHoots:
An interesting tale, I guess Joe wasn't used to ships that didn't need a pilot.
There's a few bits in the wiki quote that don't quite scan right, but only one typo that I could see that's yours:

The Black Monk Gunships are one of the most powerful of ships in the universe,

Look forward to hearing more from you.

Eldon wrote:

DaddyHoggy wrote:

Well I'm on Vermin Mediocre (10Mb) and I use Firefox (4).

Ok, so same service from the same ISP, Firefox 5 running on ubuntu 11.04 here. The problem seems to be that instead of trying to load a page from db.tt something "helpfully" adds a www so I get www.db.tt which doesn't exist Wish I knew what it was. Anyhows, thanks for the re-host.


@ RyanHoots:
An interesting tale, I guess Joe wasn't used to ships that didn't need a pilot.
There's a few bits in the wiki quote that don't quite scan right, but only one typo that I could see that's yours:

The Black Monk Gunships are one of the most powerful of ships in the universe,

Look forward to hearing more from you.

Thank you, Eldon.

Enjoyed that, nice one Ryan.

A little formatting would improve it a lot for me. Paragraph indents and new lines for speech would really help readability - some big heavy paragraphs there.

You might want to watch switching tenses from past to present too, it's jolts a little. Other than that, fab. More!

Cheers,

Drew.

drew wrote:

Enjoyed that, nice one Ryan.

A little formatting would improve it a lot for me. Paragraph indents and new lines for speech would really help readability - some big heavy paragraphs there.

You might want to watch switching tenses from past to present too, it's jolts a little. Other than that, fab. More!

Cheers,

Drew.

Komodo was one of those quick-written stories with not much thought to formatting, and little proofreading (but I'm working on a second edition). Thanks for your opinion.