Race for the Finis...
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All proofreader feedback now incorporated. Some great suggestions - thanks guys. New proof being generated so I've got to read it all again. Will be glad when this is over. I hate this part of getting a story ready... actually getting bored with the story now!
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Drew.
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<chuckles>drew wrote:I hate this part of getting a story ready... actually getting bored with the story now!
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I know that feeling...drew wrote:All proofreader feedback now incorporated. Some great suggestions - thanks guys. New proof being generated so I've got to read it all again. Will be glad when this is over. I hate this part of getting a story ready... actually getting bored with the story now!
Cheers,
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The funny thing is (and I don't know if other writers experience this) that there are parts of the story I *can* read over and over again and never grow weary of them, but other bits end up having to be really slogged through on the 'nth' reading...
Hopefully that's not a sign of crappy writing...
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Hopefully that's not a sign of crappy writing...
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My problem with final read-throughs is trying not to tinker... it's difficult.
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Hi Drew, as you've probably gathered from the lack of a second lot of feedback I haven't completed the 2nd read through as yet. If you want a second pair of eyes for the new proof feel free to email it over.drew wrote:All proofreader feedback now incorporated. Some great suggestions - thanks guys. New proof being generated so I've got to read it all again. Will be glad when this is over. I hate this part of getting a story ready... actually getting bored with the story now!
Cheers,
Drew.
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Likewise, although you've had all the information from the initial proof-read
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Re: Race for the Finis...
Just to chime in my 2c, I'm a third of the way through my second read - apart from the occasional typo missed on the first read through, I'm not finding any further issues worthy of comment.
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Re: Race for the Finis...
... and Drew, let me echo these sentiments. To be honest, I can't find anything wrong with the story from a 'story' point of view. Your plot makes sense. There have been stories that I have begun reading where I find myself losing my sense of immersion. Finis doesn't do that to me. Instead, I can see the pictures in my mind that you are trying to create, and that just happens naturally without effort on my part.El Viejo wrote:My problem with final read-throughs is trying not to tinker... it's difficult.
You've done yourself proud with this novel. There's no need to tinker.
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Thanks for all the offers and encouragement. I don't plan much tinkering, but since I've included a few extra bits and some modifications as a result of feedback I do want to read end-to-end myself before sending out a revised draft to ensure it still makes sense as a whole. Hopefully that won't take long!
I'll send out revised copies before too long!
Cheers,
Drew.
I'll send out revised copies before too long!
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Revised 'draft 2' copies going to proofreaders today. It's taken me three days to re-read the story. Picked up a handful of typos and one bizarre sentence where I'd used 'obviously' three times. Obviously, it was obvious that that sentence obviously needed some kind of obvious rewrite, so obviously I changed it in the obvious fashion, removing 'obvious' and replacing it with something less obvious, obviously.
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You went for the obvious joke there, I see...
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Second round proof copies now with proofreaders...
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it's like that use of "actual/actually" in Police Academy.drew wrote:Revised 'draft 2' copies going to proofreaders today. It's taken me three days to re-read the story. Picked up a handful of typos and one bizarre sentence where I'd used 'obviously' three times. Obviously, it was obvious that that sentence obviously needed some kind of obvious rewrite, so obviously I changed it in the obvious fashion, removing 'obvious' and replacing it with something less obvious, obviously.
Cheers,
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Or possibly abrupt and abruptly in this case...
Anyway 2nd proof read feedback should now be in your in-box, although again my email seems to be playing silly <beep>s. It seems to have something against proofread feedback!
Anyway 2nd proof read feedback should now be in your in-box, although again my email seems to be playing silly <beep>s. It seems to have something against proofread feedback!
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