To Start With... (Oolite/Elite Fiction)

CWolf · Post by **CWolf** » Wed Jul 19, 2006 5:32 pm

Hi all.

Right, I have loads of stories in progress, just thought I would test the water so to speak, so this is the very origins as it were.

I will be .pdf'ing it shortly, just posted it on EBBS as a starting point. Please do not pull punches, honest opinions wanted. Oh, may need a little patience as well, the opening is a little different (not what it looks like).

http://www.alioth.net/cgi-bin/bbs.pl?mi ... action=get

Davemak · Post by **Davemak** » Wed Jul 19, 2006 11:32 pm

Interesting twist - good read!

drew · Post by **drew** » Thu Jul 20, 2006 8:03 am

I like the idea of looking at the training side of things. How exactly do you get a pilots license at Lave? Great idea.

Nice hook at the end too. Who's the bad guy?

Better not comment on punctuation/spelling etc with my reputation.... but <whisper> there are a few! </whisper>

Keep it coming.

Cheers,

Drew.

CWolf · Post by **CWolf** » Thu Jul 20, 2006 9:10 am

Thanks for the feedback so far, yeah - I will tidy the spelling etc for the pdf. I just had to post it before I lost the nerve.

Any other comments? Does it fit well with established cannon?

drew · Post by **drew** » Mon Jul 24, 2006 10:17 am

As far as canon goes, I've based mine on Selezens excellent work and the original Novella 'The Dark Wheel'.

Selezen's stuff is here

http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/oo-timeline.asp
http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/ ... meline.asp
http://www.hughesd.co.uk/elite/content/pol-elite.asp

And 'The Dark Wheel' is here - http://www.iancgbell.clara.net/elite/dkwheel.htm

Also worth looking at is the original game manual here - http://www.iancgbell.clara.net/elite/manual.htm

Cheers,

Drew.

CWolf · Post by **CWolf** » Mon Jul 24, 2006 1:03 pm

Ta Drew - read them already but thanks anyhow.

I will hopefully get all corrected and the .pdf sorted later this week.

What glaring mistakes did you spot?